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Mr.B-G 3/14/13 Libby Mercier
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Natalie you have to listen to everything I say!” Marissa said.
Forty-eight hours earlier Natalie was walking home from the gym, her
phone starting ringing and she answered, “ hello?” , “ Natalie? you need
to go to our house in New York like right now! I’ll explain everything
when you get here. But first you need to go to the train station and go
to locker 313 and take everything in it.” ,”Marissa what is going on
where are you what did you do?.” Marissa hung up the phone. Marissa was Natalie's little sister she was 16 years old, she has long black hair
and freckles all over her nose. Her older sister Natalie was 19 she had
medium length hair and it was strawberry-blonde she also had freckles
all over her nose. The two sisters were "thick as thieves" they would do
anything to help the other. Their parents were on a three year cruise
around the world. They left the two girls a lot of money for anything
they needed over the three years, also they left the keys for all of
their houses around the country. Both Natalie and Marissa were
trustworthy and would never disappoint their parents unless they had to
or if something happened to one or both of them.
Natalie followed Marissa's instructions and cleared out locker 313 and
then got on the road for the long drive to New York. Five hours later
she pulled into the driveway of their million dollar house in New York.
She opened the door and yelled up the stairs to see if Marissa was
there. She did not answer, Natalie went up the stairs yelling,” Marissa
this isn't funny come out wherever you are!” she went up to the attic to
find that it was a mess and it looked like there was someone up here
recently. The footprints in the dust were too big to be her sisters and
too small to be anyone else. She ran downstairs and looked for some
sort of note saying where she was or if Natalie needed to go somewhere
else. she looked and looked and then after looking under over and around
everything in that house she looked under a vase and there it was a
sticky note saying that someone had her sister and if she ever wanted to
see her again alive then she had to bring the gym bag from the locker
to a train station in Maryland. She had 48 hours to get to the train
station, the note said that if she tried to contact the police then she
would never see her sister again.
Then the phone rang and Marissa was on the other line, “ Natalie you have to listen to everything I say! go to the basement and look on my laptop, open the file named stranger. Then print all the pictures in the folder. Keep your eyes out for the cars in the pictures and the man’s faces.”
Then the phone rang and Marissa was on the other line, “ Natalie you have to listen to everything I say! go to the basement and look on my laptop, open the file named stranger. Then print all the pictures in the folder. Keep your eyes out for the cars in the pictures and the man’s faces.”
Marissa! where are you? tell me where you are and I will come
and get you right now!” “I don’t know where I am but I do know that you
have to bring that bag to the train station and.” “what is in that bag!?” “ open it and find out I have to go their coming I love you!” “Marissa?” the line went dead. Natalie went up to the gym bag and looked inside, there was a ton of cash and fake passports. Natalie gasped and jumped back, then she stared at the bag zipped it up grabbed her keys and started to drive.
Natalie drove down to Maryland and went to get a hotel room so she could figure out what she was going to do tomorrow at the train station. Natalie was a smart girl who has always been interested in crime shows like CSI and NCIS:LA. She had seen one episode of NCIS and they put phone books in the bag instead of what was really in the bag then found out where the hostage was and grabbed the hostage and the people who kidnapped them. She favored this idea but there were a couple things that could go fatally wrong. So she kept her options open. Natalie took a shower and went to bed, she couldn't really sleep though so she sat on her bed and thought about what she could do. Around midnight she had a brainstorm, her dad was a cop and she kept track of all his passwords and she could look into kidnappings that fit the same thing that has happened to her sister.
She logged on as her dad and typed in what happened the database came up with two possible answers and she looked deeply into both of them. She could not figure out what one was her sisters kidnapper so she checked out where the two people were last seen one was on death row in prison and the other was never caught. She found out everything she could on this man his name was Jason Roy and he had two priors one from 2001 the girl was found and unharmed and the other was in 2010 the girl wasn't as lucky she had a black eye and was put into a coma for a month. This finding made Natalie nervous and she could not find anything else on Jason and by now it was around 6:00am she had stayed up all night long.
Just then the phone in her hotel room, she answers the phone, “ Hello...?” “ Good your awake, bring the bag to the train station at 3:00pm or you will never see you sister again.” “Oh, Jason you don’t want to do that I know all about you, but the thing is you have no idea who I am!” “ you have much to learn Natalie, 3:00 don’t forget.” The line went dead Natalie hung up the phone ,” oh and you have much to learn too.” she said Jason had no idea that she had placed a track on where he was calling from so she would know where he was at all times even if he go a new phone she would know where he was.
It was 2:30 and Natalie went to the train station and waited in the parking lot and her cell rang again to tell her where to put the gym bag. “ wheres my sister and I’ll give you the bag fight here right now you won’t even have to go in the station.” as she stepped out of the car too look for the cars in the pictures that her sister left. They were not there at least not that she could see. “ No, we are doing this my way not the other way around! go in the station go up the escalators and make the first right. Go down that hall and in the hall you will be walking down there is a bench, place the bag under there.” “and my sister will be where?” “ I know you have a picture of a red sedan she will be in the trunk and there is a key on the underside of the back tire. Open the car take you sister and drive back to New York. I think your parents are coming home soon, make sure to give my regards to you father for me.” Natalie did as he said and as soon as she placed the bag she went out of the hall and stood by the entryway of the hall and waited for them to come. One person came and it was just the janitor it was almost closing time so she went to that red sedan and looked in the trunk, her sister was there. She pulled her up took the duct tape off her mouth and hands, Marissa through her arms around her older sisters neck and squeezed as hard as she could.
They ran over to Natalie's car and hopped in, the ride back to New York was a long one and they had a lot to talk about, but there was something that Jason said when they talked together on the phone for the last time. She got another call on her cell while they were driving that night the caller ID was from New York she answered, “ Hello.” “hello is this Natalie?” “This is. Who is this?” “ this is the New York city hospital you parents have been in a car accident we think they are going to be alright but we need you to come in to be with them.” “ Me and my little sister are on our way to New York now so we will be there in like 20 minutes” “Okay we will see you then” she hung up the phone and started driving faster but not too fast. Marissa asked “who was that?” Natalie looked at her and she looked scared, “That was the hospital mom and dad have been in a car accident.” Marissa looked scared now too but they kept going staying strong for the other. When they got to New York they went straight to the hospital and went to where they had their parents.
Both their mom and dad were okay and neither one of them have any clue as to what happened. The girls mom was very happy to see them and their dad was happy too, He knew that something had happened while they were gone, but he did not want to freak out their mom so he saved it for when they went home which will be in a couple of weeks. All was good and both parents went home safe and sound. A couple years past and Marissa went to college, but in the years that passed something never felt right about what happened when their parents were gone, and it seemed as though Jason had dropped little hints here and there saying that he was still watching her. She never stopped freaking out when ever someone close to her didn't answer a phone call or a text, she never stopped looking for Jason after that day. The sad part is that she never found him, but he found her.s
1. The conflict of your story was the girl and her sister and that man and they are having a argument that seemed to get out of control.
ReplyDelete2. The girl didn't change much but she was brave enough to go and save her sister from the man.
3. My favorite part of the story was when the sister would call and tell her what to do.
4. The best thing about his story was the way it was written. I could follow the story line great.
5. The story's theme was the girl got kidnapped and her sister had to save her and them her follower followed the girl he kidnapped sister.
6. I think that whole thing was great. It was well write, well worded.
Great Job Libby!